Great+Hooks

Hi Everyone, ===Here is the page for you to post your great hooks examples. Remember - try to post at unusual times and avoid saving over someone else's work. ===

Miss Gunter
Here are the topics that we used in the hooks class:

- A story about a girl or boy flying on an airplane alone for the first time.

- A story about a valuable ring that has been stolen and must be found.

- A story about an alien visiting Earth and making friends with a human.

-A story about two best friends who got in a fight but want to fix their friendship

"How rude!, this is my wife!" Jon said.
Kayla: 1)Why is it shaking I think I am going to be sick 2) Beep

Beep

Beep,

Sounded the alarm and the security guards came running in.


 * Comment: I really like your hook Jiwan: they were green **
 * Comment: I also like your second hook Jay Won **

__ Whats up guys! __ __ Hey its mason and these are the hooks for the story where a story about a valuable ring that has been stolen! I hope that MYSTERIOUS thing happens again when someone deletes it... __

__1. Some say that The Ring is still hidden in the castle. Others say it was stolen by a dark creature still living in the dark woods, but no one knows the whole story...__

__This ones for the human and the alien friend thing__

__2. I never actually believed in aliens till the THING came. The huge, big, fat, CUTE thing....__

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1. Jessica knew it was wrong, but the wonderful feeling of the airplane was too overwhelming.

2. They were green,I couldn't explain any better, They were green.

Jiwan Lee

Tamara, I really like your first hook. Good job. -Jenny 7c
BY ERIC KANG 8H

His heart was starting to pound faster as the wheels left the ground. With nobody to nag him,

he was finally free.

First airplane trip for a boy

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 * Margaux: **


 * I was so excited last night, but as the minutes past, my heart is pomping and I am asking myself all sorts of questions. What is going to happen to me ????? **


 * - ** A story about a girl or boy flying on an airplane alone for the first time.

Margaux, I like the way you put a question at the end. It's very intriguing! - Jasmine
Jake Hyun 7S 1)Sam felt sick being 1000 meters above the ground.   2)It was already too late when I got there. 3)I was eating my breakfast five minutes before a spaceship blew up my house.   4)I was already having a bad day even before I fought with my best friend.

Comments: Nice hook Jay Won! The second one makes me wonder who'THEY' are. And Mason ,I wanted to do four.It doesn't matter.B y the way Mason, your second one is good because the word 'CUTE' makes me go like "what?". Good Jake! Nice four sentences!!

Jay Won Lee 7S 1. The creatures' footsteps echoed down the never ending tunnels.......   2. Tom was running out of time cause THEY were closing in.....   Good thing that you used ......after the sentence! ___  Wow everyone! I'm really impressed with your work on the hooks so far. Good job using the Wiki too! Have a good rest,  Miss Gunter -- =Jayne Kim 7C= It was the worst choice ever! I shouldn’t have got on this…. The airplane. I never thought it would feel like this...bumpy, shaky, crowded. Also, it MAKES ME FEEL SICK!!

Known as the black ring, which brings unfortunate events must be found or else… it’s the end.

Friends are worth my life, I don’t care who or what it is.

Comments: Nice hook Jiwan! An airplane with a wonderful feeling....... unexpected. Margaux, your hook is very nice! I like it, it's very interesting and it makes me want to know what's going to happen next.

Jayne, I like the idea of a 'black' ring. Very effective! -Jasmine
I think you should get rid of etc. on the first one (Ryan)


 * Christine Lee: Your hook is very interesting, and I really like the fact that you ended your sentence at the climax point! **

1). Under the mat I could see a giant face smiling at me.

2).One, two,.. here goes the pitcher!

By,Daniel Chung7C

Comment: I like the first hook! It's really really attractive! -Jenny 7c
I like the way you described the alien friend as the 'strange-looking creature'.I also like the fourth hook you have written.Good Job Jasmine!!!-Jayne

1,2,3.....BOOM!!! “Run!!!” Yelled the stranger.

Jenny 7c


 * Christine Lee: Your hook is good, but I think it would be better if you add little more information. I would like to know what is going on in this sentence. **

Ryan Lee 7C Hi Everybody! - A story about a girl or boy flying on an airplane alone for the first time. I knew I made a mistake when I went inside the airport.

- A story about an alien visiting Earth and making friends with a human. Grave yards are probably the best place to play with an alien.

-A story about two best friends who got in a fight but want to fix their friendship. I know I want to be friends again with Tom. But I just can’t.


 * Christine Lee: I really like your sentences! Your sentence gave enough informations, and I especially liked the second one. **

Eric kim
Good!! I like it...-Ryan I like the description of the' green friend', and the way you described that the ring can change the world.-Jayne

-The man was already dead even before they got there.

= -If you are reading this,you may be in great danger, so listen carefully. =

= -It was dawn when I first saw it. =

= David Song, 8H =


 * Christine Lee: Your sentences absolutely is a hook, but I wish I could know more about them. Like it would be better if you tell what 'it' is. **


 * Hong Chan 7c**


 * 1** **“Hello, this is Captain Krash speaking and welcome to the airline” said the Captain, the boy then shivered**
 * with fear.**


 * 2** **My last memory of that ring was when it rolled gently and briskly down the grey, stone pavement.**

**Christine Lee:** **I think this is a very good hook, because you wrote enough information. It helped me know what is going on.**


 * “I’ll do anything for you, if you let me be your best friend.” **
 * Unusual faces were around, no mummy and daddy. **
 * Comment1: I like the way you wrote your hook, Jake. It catches reader’s attraction. **
 * Comment2: You’ve got a nice hook there Daniel! **
 * By Jay Joo, 7C **

This is Adri, my hooks: 1. “Flight 13A is now boarding” the speakers shout. I take a deep breath, here I go…. 2. “Ahhh!” I screamed, pulling out my hair, “Where is it?” 3. Opening the door I screamed, “What is it?” Mason, I like your first hook, it’s really mysterious and has me wondering about the story straight away. Jayne, I like your second hook, sounds scary and makes me want to read on and find out more. Jasmine, I like your fourth hook, it’s so straight to the point.

**Christine Lee 7C**

A story about a girl or boy flying on an airplane alone for the first time: **Looking around, only thing he could thought of was that he was alone in the sky.**

A story about a valuable ring that has been stolen and must be found. **"Where is the ring?" Everyone is running around shouting, but one boy says, "It must be him"**

A story about an alien visiting Earth and making friends with a human. **"Hello, Mister!" I smiled back, but it was just a fake smile made to cover his real appearance.**

하good! I like them... -Ryan **Jay Shim 8H**

**"A dark figure broke the stillness of the night"**

Hi, this is Sarah Hong in awesome 7s!

This is a hook of my favorite book called ‘The Lost Hero'.

The hook is ‘The hero lost his memory and what would happen to him, what a big trouble.. Who am I ???And where am I??’

I really liked the book "The Lost Hero" as well - Hong-Chan

**Hi Its Julia**

**Here's a hook:**

** "WE ARE MOVING!!!" sang mum downstairs, EVERYONE IN THE HOUSE STOPPED AND SHOUTED "WHAT!!???!!!???!!!" **
I’m shivering with cold, but perspiration is forming in the palm of my hands. My heart beats faster and faster as the minutes go by. I’m afraid my heart will burst. I’m afraid I won’t be able to reach land again. I’m afraid the sky will fall down on us. In conclusion, I’m worrying about everything when I’m supposed to enjoy this journey. A shot went through the storekeeper’s head, and as quick as a wink, the livid blue ring was gone. It was when I went outside that I screamed for the first time like a girl. The sight of the horrendous, slimy, dripping creature covered in purple goo would’ve sent anyone screaming their head off. But this is how I met my first extra-terrestrial friend. **-A story about two best friends who got in a fight but want to fix their friendship**
 * Hey people, this is Lucy :D**
 * -A story about a girl or boy flying on an airplane alone for the first time.**
 * - A story about a valuable ring that has been stolen and must be found.**
 * - A story about an alien visiting Earth and making friends with a human.**

hello this is justin ha. these are the hooks i did for... To be in a plane all alone- Here I am all alone in a freaking plane still and silent

I think this is it.... (?)
Soyeon^^:

Here is my hook: Stalker couldn't stop stalking.He tried anything to stop himself from stalking.


 * Hi everyone this is Jocelyn Ra of 7S!!! Sorry, but my hooks are gonna be kinda long... and I favour the writing of first person.. **


 * My hooks: **


 * 1. __Airplane ride__ **


 * a) My vision exploded into stars as I clenced my fist into a white ball with pure,sheer terror. My body refused to move when I ordered and instead turned into jelly as I wobbled clumsily down the isle **
 * b) I took a deep calming, shaking breath in and forced my blood, which had ben frozen with nervousness, and rush up into my head again so that I could think properly again. **


 * 2. __Alien making friends with a human__ **
 * My heart relaxed and my stomach loosened its hold on the impenetrable knot in my stomach as the the blue thing slowy extended an ovesized paw an stretched what seemed like a toothy grin on his lopsided face. **
 * 3. __A missing jewel__ **
 * My jaw dropped open. I looked like a perfect, proffetional stupidity as I blinked once with disbelief with a dubfounded expression on my now- long face. **
 * __ **


 * Erin- **


 * 1. When I woke up in the plane of sickness, next to me there was a strange girl who was sleeping with her eyes shut.**
 * 2. 'BEEP! BEEP! BEEP!' the security alarm ringed in a dark mysterious room.**
 * 3. When I woke up the first thing I saw was a odd silhouette which did NOT look like a human.**